As a brief set-up, Kasey is has been hired to escort a caged criminal, and this is their first meeting. I don't normally get into so much description, instead focusing on dialogue, so it will be interesting to see how this passage is perceived.
His massive forearms rested against the wall of his cage. Black metal bands wrapped around his wrists while muscles bulged all across his body. There wasn’t a single hair on his body, and Kasey couldn’t tell whether he even had a neck to speak of. Elaborate body markings covered every spot she could see, and likely those she couldn’t due to his thick black shorts. She focused on one in particular, centered on his sternum, was an elegant piece of artwork, a ring of fire. If it wasn’t for the fact he was a known criminal, she may have been attracted to this specimen.
“This is Estil Ortiz.” The young officer motioned with his head while the criminal stared through Kasey with two dark black eyes. She shivered on the inside, for this was no common criminal.
She should have demanded more money.
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Love the description!
ReplyDeleteYes, really good description! I'm itching to know what crime he's committed. :D
ReplyDeleteI'd say you did a fine job with the description. Good snippet!
ReplyDeleteOh, definitely, demand more money! I suspect she's going to need it. Great snippet, and looking forward to reading more of this on its release! Congrats!!
ReplyDelete"She should have demanded more money." Heck yeah! Oh my, this one is going to be fun! Some of my favorite adventures have started this way! Congratulations on this. Looking forward to its release!
ReplyDeleteI'm sure he's probably very nice - probably helps his landlady out with the garbage, and takes care of orphaned children in his off hours.
ReplyDeleteYes, I'm sure he was just on his way to pick up his latest humanitarian award, Cary. :-P
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone for stopping by, and for the comments on the description. I always consider it one of my biggest weaknesses, so hopefully I'm over the hump, maybe? :-)
Always more money. They never pay you enough.
ReplyDeleteExcellent work. And, yes, she should have demanded more money!
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by! Yes, she definitely should have demanded more...but when one's down on their luck as Kasey has been, you don't want to risk losing a job. ;-)
ReplyDeleteCongratulations on being accepted into the anthology! Great description.
ReplyDeleteThanks! It's good to know I can still get some acceptances from time to time... ;-)
ReplyDeleteWere the black metal bands attached to anything? doesn't sound like the kind of things his captors wold have left as decoration.
ReplyDeleteOh, the bands *definitely* have a purpose, which they get to shortly after this snippet...hee hee. :-D
ReplyDeleteNice description. I feel the sparks flying!
ReplyDeleteThanks! Ironically, sparks flying may be the least of their problems before long... ;-)
ReplyDeleteVery nice description! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks! :-)
ReplyDeleteAnytime you get a shiver, you should always ask for more money.
ReplyDeleteThat's generally my policy...
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