06 July 2012

SFFS: A Snippet from "Genesis"

Welcome to another installment of Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday on the blog. Thanks for all the feedback you give on my snippets, but be sure to go visit all of the other writers through the SFFS link above as well.

I'm diving back into the archives again today, with "Genesis," a story that I'd written long ago. My hope is to bring several snippets from this one over the next few weeks. So, hopefully you'll enjoy them and bring your wonderful comments along:
“Surely there has to be something,” insisted my companion.

He was always a little slow to believe me. “There’s no money left, Duff, nothing at all.”

“How did this happen, Colin?”

I tried not to roll my eyes, though I’d warned him many times about this very situation. It wasn’t as if he’d listened. Instead, his spending had continued, regardless of the fact neither of us could remember our last job.

“Money goes out, but nothing comes in,” I muttered.

“We don’t even have enough to eat?” He tilted his head and trained his sad, brown eyes on me.

Be sure to check back again next week when I continue this story. Again, I always enjoy your comments!

16 comments:

  1. "Sad, brown eyes"? Is his companion a cocker spaniel? (If so, that would explain the failure to grasp basic economic concepts.)

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  2. Makes one wonder why there's no income. Looking forward to more.

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  3. He does come off as rather puppy-dog-like, that's for sure, Cassandra. Not very smart, either... :-)

    The age-old problem, Patrick, of work being hard to come by in deep space. Maybe if he took some of the more illegal stuff like Aston does... :-D

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  4. I know people like Duffy. Intimately. And you're right--they never listen and then when they run into a problem they look to your for help and you're torn between wanting to help and wanting not to, just so they'll maybe learn a lesson! Argh! I liked this snippet because it's relatable and you've given us a good look into Colin's mind with his inner monologue.

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  5. There's a lot of information about both of them in this. Makes me wonder why he keeps the dimwit puppy dog around. I'm hooked.

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  6. Yup, the dumb little puppy--great characterization in such a short section!

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  7. You should present this snippet at the next G20 summit!

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  8. Hate when that happens...running out of money. Nice little snippet, and I too, am intrigued to learn more and why they're in their predicament.

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  9. Cary, they'd probably sympathize with Duffy and wonder why someone wasn't bailing him out... :-P

    This is actually part of a series I'd been toying with long ago. I do plan on bringing out more snippets from this one over the next several weeks, so we'll see how it goes. :-)

    Thanks, everyone, for stopping by and commenting! I always enjoy it!

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  10. Just go to the magic money giving machine.

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  11. And show me the way to get there!

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  12. I think someone needs to learn how to budget and not live beyond their means. I'm wondering what line of work they normally do, and why they've not had a job in a while.

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  13. Hopefully that will become clear in the next few snippets... :-)

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  14. Oh noes, no food? Time to get a job fast! Any job.

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  15. That would be my suggestion, too...unless something miraculous takes place.

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